Thursday, September 23, 2010
Writing Scene: Waves Rolling Up a Shore, Over Rocks
I was in a wonderland, where the trees grew at impecable speed, and the sharp crack of the ocean against the flawless rocks deafened me. I could just reach over and stroke the feather-soft leaves of the tree towering over me. The rocks were like glass, with a million colors trembling through them. I layed down on the warm sand, and gazed above me at the blazing sun. It beckoned me, trying to force me to climb the sky to the Great Star. I smiled at it, and it seemed as though it was smiling, too. As the waves rolled over the rocks once more, then drew back into the ice cold water, I sank back to the ground in closure.
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I really like your word choice. (flawless, feather-soft)
ReplyDeleteThis was fantastic. The vocabulary -- closure, deafened, beckoned -- all had a great affect on the piece. I also love the sentence structure. You don't write in simplistic patterns, but in ways that allow the words and thoughts to really stand apart to be noticed. Your first sentence is a great example of this. Awesome first entry! You may wish to add to this, or further develop it if the mood strikes you.
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